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Friday 13 May 2016

Shoe Narrative

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LI: To use the 5 senses and personification to help us paint a picture with words.
“Michael Jordan scores again!” Shouted the announcer. It was a basketball game between Chicago Bulls and Florida Tornadoes. “What happening, Jim! I think MJ putting on his Converses. Someone please stop this man!” The announcer screamed as the fans erupted like a volcano. There I was, my arms stretched together making a rippling sounds to all the other shoes. Loud boos begin to enter my mind. It was like they were screaming at me for doing something wrong. Minutes ago, I was lying in my big apartment with a view of all my friends. Growing old started ascending on me a while ago. I feel like I was aging every second. While people booed I started crying. I don’t why or how, but I sure knew I wasn’t welcomed by other people.  Because I was a old model of a shoe I was no longer liked by other people. Michael Jordan who is the famous basketball player, is my owner and I think he doesn’t like me anymore. When he wears me other people boo and scream. The game was tiring. I smell  sweat as if I had just eaten it an  hour ago, all inside of me and water touch my arms.
Later that night
I was in my owner’s hands when suddenly...
*Boom*
Smoke covers my sight. I guess i’m on my own. An old ugly pair of shoes left between a rock and a hard place. How can I survive this situation?

Today, Daniel and I were working on a story. The story was meant to surround old shoes (the character you are). The story had to the tell the reader what the shoes smelled, taste, touched and saw.

3 comments:

Robyn Anderson said...

Your vivid description of events through the eyes of your shoes paints a very clear picture in my mind. I can feel their pain! Well written boys.

Leopote said...

Really good Pote a good descriptive piece.

Leopote said...

By mum and dad

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